College Essay Reflection:
I grew through the college essay boot camp in thesis writing and turning prompts/lists into an essay. I worked with Lori on my thesis and helping it connect back to everything in my essay which helped a lot and made it very good. Also my prompt was to list achievements, goals, church involvement, etc. which is hard to do when you have to make it flow well and have it look professional. Over the course from my first draft of it to the last draft it improved immensely! One of the ways it was before was I started it off with, "Im from Durango, Co and have lived here all my life." I got pushed to revise this sentence and others like it that were boring and just saying information. I changed them into better and more vibrant sentences that flow and sound good. I then changed this into a hook and anecdote about my time in church and how I used to spend it vs how I spend it now: "I used to be that kid who would color and sleep during church, I also used to be the kid who didn't want to go to church. However as I have gone through high school here, I have found a bigger interest and desire to go to church and be a part of it--in fact, the church is the main area in which I have been able to develop as a leader, and be involved in my community and in the global community." This growth happened because I was focused and worked on it a lot. I also conferenced with Lori twice which helped because I was able to get feedback about how to make it better which added to the final product. Lastly, peer critique was very useful when doing this and helped get my sentences and essay to something I was proud of.